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01/14/10
That is exactly what goes through our minds... A sad, but realistic, situation in your story.
01/14/10
Gritty, realistic portrayal of the event, the awkward conversation and of your MC's emotions and swirling thoughts. I feel that clearer paragraph breaks would give it greater impact, as would keeping to one tense. Since it confronts us with a social and spiritual wound that is not going away, you may get away with keeping it in present tense. But overall, very well done.
01/14/10
Very, very moving...so much pain in this world! Well done!
The battles we fight in our minds, whether or not to give that cash...
A space between the paragraphs would help make it easier to read.

Other than that, it's an excellent piece.