The Official Writing Challenge
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12/11/09
Cute story—smart little kid!
12/15/09
Great work on this poignant story. You kept my attention throughout. I especially enjoyed Abby's thoughtfulness toward Gloomy.
12/16/09
Excellent work Bryan, well crafted story. I like the way that you transitioned from Gloomy trudging/stomping away to skipping at the end. Extremely creative story line, great job!
I enjoyed the story and liked particularly the clown's new drawings on his face.
12/16/09
Beautiful, creative story. Loved it!
12/16/09
Loved everything--the story and the compassion of Abby
12/16/09
A lovely story that touches the heart. I can imagine the bewilderment of what went on in the clown's mind when told “Gloomy, I have a gift for your little boy.” I like the closure at the end that embraces the truth of God's salvation to all who believes and receive Jesus as Lord and Savior.
12/16/09
Great story! I was totally caught up and didn't even notice the typos you mentioned. I love it!