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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Brown (11/26/09)

TITLE: Chocolate Milk and Cheeseburgers
By Bryan Coomes
12/02/09


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There once was this old farmer Brown
Who was known for his cows and his frown
Everyday he would come
With a face looking glum
Bringing jugs of white milk into town

His demeanor would always remain
Regardless of sun or of rain
We peruse his wares,
He stands there and stares
Everyday was always the same

I remember it like yesterday
In spite of the clouds of dark gray
Farmer Brown came to town
Not wearing his frown
As we all looked at each other dismayed

His quick stride replaced his plod
His bright smile was not a facade
Seeing such a stark change
It struck us all strange
We wondered why he acted so odd

In moments it all came to light
As his eyes began shining so bright
His wares he displayed
For this was no charade
His work had become his delight

"I've got the sure thing don't you see?
Chocolate," he said joyfully.
His jugs of white milk
Swirled now like brown silk
"Would you care for just one, two, or three?"

We all looked at each other bemused
When he noticed that we were confused
He began to speak
As our interest was peaked
But he paused for a moment amused

After smirking a moment or two
He said that this story is true
He told us of how
This magic brown cow
Would make chocolate milk when it mooed

The brown cow had just come from the blue
Farmer Brown was not sure what to do
He slowly approached
With a tethering rope
The cow stood, then it mooed, then it spewed

As his face became bathed with the brown
He stumbled and fell to the ground
But then it came clear
This was not just some steer
In fact this was quite the cash cow

"So as you can all plainly see
This milk is extraordinary.
So come now my friends
I will ask once again
Will it be one, maybe two, perhaps three?"

“Before we can promise to buy,
We need to behold with our eyes
This magic brown cow
So we can see how
This is not just some fanciful lie.”

“Gladly friends, please just follow me.
She’s at home resting peacefully.
When she’s done with her nap
Then I’ll put her on tap
So you’ll finally be able to see.”

As we drew near the farm something fine
An aroma resplendent, divine
The look on Brown’s face
As he picked up the pace
Confirming the smell’s grilled bovine

Arriving to a scene that’s surreal
There’s a table that’s set for a meal
Farmer Brown’s normal frown
Has come back around
He now looks as if he can’t feel

As Mrs. Brown brings out plates of grilled meat
She sweetly bids us have a seat
In front of each chair
Each place is prepared
With a glass of choc’late milk so sweet

Sitting down at the table we see
The brown cow in all her glory
She’s perfectly ground
And perfectly round
And quite tasty when covered with cheese


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Francy Judge12/04/09
This was very funny. The rhyme scheme added to the humor. I loved your ending. Great job.
Francy Judge12/06/09
I read this a second time because I liked it so much. I noticed stumbling at the same verse. "Swirled now like brown silk" might flow better if you said, "Now swirled like brown silk." Ask others their opinion.

Loved it again.
c clemons12/07/09
Ryhme was good but needs a little work. Keep writing.