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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Brown (11/26/09)

TITLE: DID YOU?
By Philippa Geaney
12/01/09


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When trees grew in the garden
Of Edenís paradise
Did You pause and look upon the wood
Of Your coming sacrifice?

When the Godhead walked with Adam
And earth was fertile brown?
Did you see a thorn bush growing
That would one day form a crown?

Did Your heart contract with sorrow
When man did not conceive
That he would choose rebellion
And the serpent would deceive?

When Calvaryís Hill, Your hand did mould
Of rich brown earth and rock
Did You see the Bulls of Bashan
As they gathered there to mock?

When autumn leaves of dripping gold
To earthly brown, did fall
Did you see the battered bleeding Lamb
Redemptionís price for all?

And did the weeping mother
Whose heart was pierced with sword
Cause Father Son and Holy Ghost
To grieve with One accord?


Itís all from wonder that I ask -
Your plan in part concealed
You held Redemption in Your heart
Till the Son would be revealed.

I know Ė
O God Most Holy
As Love, You did come down
And on a splintered wooden cross
Red mingled with the brown. (184 words)


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Ruth Brown 12/03/09
What a beautiful poem. I am profoundly touched by the content.Perfect touch with the mingle of Jesus blood with the brown,I only see positives here.
Adetokunbo Oluwasanjo12/03/09
Beautiful.Just that one word.Beautiful.
Noel Mitaxa 12/04/09
A beautiful picture of the openheartedness of our God.
DANIEL MBAJIORGU12/04/09
Eight beautiful quatrains set in ballad stanzas (though with an expection of a few lines having in their metering a shortage or a surplus of syllable and causing disharmony). Message rich and purposeful- from a serious poet I guess. Concept patterned closely after William Blake's, The Tyger, especially in the rhetorical questions (compare your 'Did You' and his 'Did he'). I also understand clearly that the first line of your last stanza must have been trauncated mistakenly, yet the picture is all complete and the work marvellous. Seem to like this entry most in this level and do hope you win first place or appear in the EC. Congratulations in advance.
Laura Anne Harrison12/05/09
This poem really touched my heart and soul. Excellent writing!
Colin Nielsen 12/11/09
This is by far my most favourite piece out of all you have written. I'm surprised you didn't do better with the rankings. Well done.