The Official Writing Challenge
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11/28/09
Fun fun! I could see this in a girl's magazine.
11/28/09
Cute story. I loved the orange peel over the mouth-typical kid!!!
11/29/09
What a delightful read! I felt like a 15 year old girl again, reading it! Very good job!
12/01/09
A cute, fun and enjoyable orange story.

Colin
12/01/09
I love your characters and descriptions. I could feel the cold and I loved the girls. But it felt like something was missing, like this is part of a bigger story. I want to read the rest of it.
12/01/09
Super entry. Coaches can make huge impact in the lives of kids, and it's evident your MC did just that. Well done!
12/01/09
Great work, I loved the realistic dialogue and the details of a the rainy day game that I think many of us have attended sometime in our lives :). Great fun to read!
12/02/09
Awfully sweet! A great read for teen girls.
12/02/09
So cute with great interaction and a lively give and take dialogue.
12/02/09
I think it is hard to write about a game and stay congruent, but you did it very well. Ditto on descriptions. All well done.
12/02/09
Just wait -- forty years from now this game will be remembered as being played in minus ten degree weather. Good job, coach.
12/02/09
Really enjoyed this piece. Loved all the appreciation the coach received from the team. Well done!
12/02/09
Aww, this was so sweet, and it makes me love you more knowing the backstory. Loved it.