The Official Writing Challenge
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11/27/09
You did a good job describing the elder woman's physical condition and also her emotional state. I was a little confused by the last paragraph...I don't think I understand the phrase "the yellow of His grace." Even so, the story itself was interesting and the relationship between these two intriguing.
11/27/09
This was indeed touching and well written. I relate to the relationship and the honesty.
Your story was touching, creative and very well written. It made me ache for Linda. Only one problem: you tacked on orange at the end and I couldn't see the connection. Good story though.
11/30/09
This had moments of great writing but at the end you leave the reader wondering what does the color orange have to do with anything. Keep writing.