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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Yellow (11/12/09)

TITLE: It's Never Too Late To Dream
By Connie Dixon
11/18/09


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That Friday afternoon I fell into my Lazy Boy, exhausted from a stressful day at the office. The front door jolted open and Mike eagerly came bounding up the stairs.

Breathless, he said, “Hi Honey, how was your day?”

“Don’t ask.”

“I found an ad in the newspaper that you might be interested in.”

I groaned, “Can it wait? I am so tired.”

No less enthusiastic, my husband of nine years sat down at the breakfast nook and started rifling through the Herald. Here it is: 547-3266. He picked up the phone and headed downstairs. I was curious about his excitement, but my head was pounding and my feet were killing me.

Reclining completely, I began to drift off.

“Great!” he exclaimed on his way back upstairs, waking me out of my light sleep.

“What is going on? What are you so excited about?”

“You’re going to love this. I know you’re tired but we need to look at something tonight. I want you to see it before it’s too late!”

“For Heaven’s sake, what is it?”

“You’re not going to believe it – I found your dream car.”

“What do you mean my dream car? I have a car.”

“No, you don’t understand…I found your dream car, you know…the one you’ve always wanted but never thought you’d get because they’re so rare and people hang onto them forever.

I sat up straight. “You mean my bug – my Volkswagen convertible?”

“I mean your yellow Volkswagen convertible. There’s one in Benton City… listed today. I told them we’d be down to look at it tonight.”

Reaching to the side of my chair, I pulled on the bar that would send me back to my horizontal position. Then, I flipped on the T.V. and stretched out as far as possible, looking straight ahead while my perplexed husband stood shocked at my indifference.

“Did you hear me? This is your chance to get the car you’ve always wanted. Why are you just sitting there?”

“Where are we going to get the money to buy this car? I thought we were strapped for cash.”

“Well, yeah that’s true. We’re not rolling in the dough right now, but let’s just go look at it!”

“Honey, I don’t want to get all excited about something we can’t afford. If we had the money that would be one thing but…”

“Let’s just go down, take it for a spin and see what condition she’s in. I gotta tell ya, if this car is as good as the owner says it is, she’s asking a fair price…an affordable price.” He reached his hand out to me and pulled me out of my chair. “C’mon, let’s go.”

“Okay, but I’m not getting my hopes up ‘cause I don’t want to be disappointed.”

The drive through the valley renewed my spirit. It was a beautiful fall evening, about 78 degrees. The sun was just beginning to settle behind a hill. We have the best sunsets here. I think God likes us best.

Mike was focused on the directions. “There it is…Perry Road. Turn right, drive for three miles and there will be a mobile home on the left with a yellow bug out front – can’t miss it!”

My pessimism resurfaced: “Right!”

Two wineries and another mile later, there it was. “Wow! When she said yellow, she wasn’t kidding!”

The little car was parked out front, looking kind of lonely. The top was down. Yeah.

As we drove up the gravel driveway, a young woman in her late twenties appeared. “Hi, are you Mike?”

“Yeah. Wow – she’s a beaut! What year is she?”

“1971, first year of the Super Beetle with 53,000 original miles.”

“You’re kidding – 23 years old and only 53,000? That’s amazing.”

We walked around the car a couple times. My heart started pounding; I couldn’t get the smile off my face. “Can we take it out?”

The woman handed me the keys and we took off. Driving down a country road with my hair blowing in the wind and my husband at my side… in my dream car, it doesn’t get much better than this.

Mike turned to me and looked into my eyes, “Honey, I want to make this dream happen for you.”

At our return she asked, “Well, what do you think?”

Mike didn’t waste any time, “What’s your bottom price?”

The woman said she had to have $3,400.00 for it.

Mike winked at me and reached for his wallet. “Sold!”


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Joy Bach 11/19/09
What a delightful story. I was right there, exhausted, in the chair and then caught up in Mike's enthusiasm. Thanks for sharing this.
Margaret Gass11/19/09
What a delightful portrait of Mike's love for you! Well-written and engaging...makes me wish I could put the top down on my dream car! :-)
Jim McWhinnie 11/23/09
Spot on dialog told with such vivid economy of words.
Leah Nichols 11/24/09
I just knew he was going to buy it for her, but it didn't make the piece any less delightful. :) And yes, that area is absolutely beautiful....sunsets are the best!
Amanda Lynch 11/24/09
How fun! I love when something can pull me out of that "after work funk" and into the world where dreams come true!
Barbara Lynn Culler11/24/09
I loved your story! I so understand that exhaustion, and then suddenly, life returns! I could even feel the warm breeze on that afternoon. Great use of topic

This read so easily for me, and I was really anticipating a happy ending.
Jan Ackerson 11/24/09
This is delightful--although the only VW Bug I ever had, I HATED.

Your dialogue is deft, and your characters very likeable!
Patricia Turner11/24/09
Your characterization is top-notch and very believable. A delightful read.
Ruth Brown 11/24/09
Perfect title to a delightful tale.Good writing.
Maryknoll Claveria Santos11/24/09
What a sweet and generous husband!
Where's your yellow topic?
Good writing on the dialogue, sounds very real!

Maryknoll Claveria Santos11/24/09
I also enjoy the carpet of yellow daisy-like flowers, capeweed, spread all over our land in winter and spring!

I enjoyed your entry about Michael's enduring love (I, mean, endearing love) even after all the years of married life with his beautiful wife. Very sweet!

Cheers for sharing this lovely piece. Thank you.

Noel Mitaxa 11/26/09
Great interaction, energy and conversation between well-portrayed characters. Like Jan, I felt slightly let-down by the VW aspect, but thanks for the ride.


   
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