The Official Writing Challenge
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11/19/09
loved the chase. nice action. great writing.
11/23/09
You created a beautiful setting and had great pacing. Check your grammar in a few places, the tiny errors are the easiest to miss. I personally dislike stories that end with the person realizing it's "just a dream," but you definitely created a tension-filled lead up to the conclusion.
11/25/09
But, Rachel, you missed the point at the end. It is not ONLY a dream.
01/26/10
Oh, I'm glad it was a dream, too. My heart was beating, as the story progressed, wondering what was happening to these beautiful creatures of the sea...So glad I could let my breath out at last, learning that Rascal had just had a bad dream....Good writing...Helen