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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Yellow (11/12/09)

TITLE: my miss yellow roses
By Jim McWhinnie
11/14/09


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On the occasion of coming upon my wifeís wedding bouquet of yellow roses and daisies, I wrote these words for her as a prayer of thanksgiving to God for Debbie, the most beautiful gift a man could ever receive from God.

she is my miss yellow roses,
my field of pure white daisies,
my gracious, gentle angel endowed with summer sunshine curls,
she is the laughter of being loved,
she is mine, she is Godís, she is the better part of me.

she is my miss yellow roses,
my field of springtime dreams and autumn memories,
my precious, sparkling jewel endowed with sapphire eyes of mountain blue,
she is the exquisite simplicity of a life so well-lived,
she is mine, she is Godís, she is the better part of me.

she is my miss yellow roses,
my field of possibility and peace,
my joyous, smiling sunrise endowed with forgiveness in her heart,
she is the mercy that flows from heavenís cool water realms,
she is mine, she is Godís, she is the better part of me.

she is my miss yellow roses,
my field of mellow days of golden harvest,
my bounteous providence endowed with Godís understanding love,
she is the beauty that grows more beautiful with each of our passing years,
she is mine, she is Godís, she is the better part of me.


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larry troxell 11/19/09
what a beautiful love poem!
Gillian Dobson11/20/09
Great poem. How lucky your wife is to have such a romantic husband. I loved the way you brought other aspects of 'yellow' into the poem - sunshine, sunrise, golden harvest. Congratulations.
Leah Nichols 11/24/09
Can you teach my young man some lessons in romance? :) Seriously, though, this is a very beautifully written poem.
Connie Dixon11/24/09
Awesome tribute to someone who must feel very valued and treasured by your thoughtful words. A good lesson for all of us.
Mona Purvis11/24/09
Oh to be someone's springtime dreams and autumn memories! That's a relationship for the long haul.
Just love this.
Jim, you have found the right format for your creative writing. It allows you to express your deeply-beautiful thoughts.
Mona
Barbara Lynn Culler11/24/09
I would be swooning in love if this poem was for me. Wow!
Jan Ackerson 11/24/09
Absolutely lovely. She is very blessed to have you.
Bryan Ridenour11/24/09
Fantastic poem. Loved the reminder that my wife too is "the better part of me." Well done!
Patricia Turner11/24/09
Oh, Jim, this is so lovely. And like all the others who've commented, I believe she's very lucky to have you.
Mary Knoll Santos11/24/09
I loved this poem! Brings back fond memories of my and my husband's "younger" courtship days (grin).
Your wife is so blessed to have you.
Thanks for the lovely, sweet poem.
Kate Oliver Webb11/24/09
I so agree with the others: it's a lovely, sweet, loving poem. Could one of our musically-gifted friends set this to a melody? Seems like it would make a beautiful love song (maybe even become a standard for weddings or anniversaries).
Betty Castleberry11/25/09
I can't add much to what others have said, but I do have to say this is romantic and beautiful.
Allen Stark11/25/09
This is so beautiful I can hear music playing as I read it. I, too, love letting my lovely wife, who seems to float by me on angel wings, know how I see and feel about her. I just wish I had your poetic talent.
Verna Cole Mitchell 11/25/09
I never read a love poem I enjoyed more. Your miss yellow roses is, indeed, fortunate. Your repetition is just right.