The Official Writing Challenge
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Lovely. You hooked me with the opening and I'm glad I stayed for the rest. Great story well told. Very minor quibnle: Two phrases, "I raised my eyebrows as high as I could above me baby blues" and "peaches and cream face" were nice ideas but didn't quite flow like the rest of the story.
sorry make that quibble. Dyslexic fingers.
A great message of hope is enclosed here. The messaage "children are never expendable" needs telling: you have done it well and made this an entertaining read at the same time.
Your title made me curious, and I'm glad I took the time to read. A beautiful little tale, which will likely make me smile throughout the day. I loved the first description of Pistol Pete. Well done.
11/18/09
Tender story. Well done!