The Official Writing Challenge
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11/15/09
Wonderful descriptions in this piece.
Beautiful descriptions, yet I felt too overwhelmed by it all and skipped through the story.
11/17/09
Beautiful story, but I have to agree that the descriptions tended to drag a little. One solution could have been formatting - trying to break the paragraphs up a little more - or simply paring it down a little. I love your artistry with words.
11/19/09
I loved the line near the end, "But my renditions are pale and insignificant beside the matchless, absolute perfection of Godís creation..."
Lovely prose that flirts with the poetic. Congratulations on your EC!
11/19/09
I could almost see the sunset... and understand how purple became your favorite color for that splendid monent in time. Congratulations on your third place win in level, and EC. Well deserved.