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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Luggage (08/15/05)

TITLE: Soulful Desire
By Debra Brand
08/19/05


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“I’ve lost my sole!”

“What do you mean? You can’t lose your soul! Remember what He said ‘I will never leave you nor forsake you?’

“No, look!” Judas lifted his robe. The thong ties had broken and the bottom of his sandal flopped in the dust. “See! I’ve lost my sole!”

“Not amusing! You shouldn’t be speaking things like that when we’re on a mission. We have to get to the next town! Here, let me.” Exasperated, Simon bent down and tied Judas’ sandal together again.

“You know, Simon, what if my sandal doesn’t hold together until we reach shelter? What then, huh? Why couldn’t I bring my extra shoes and cloak?

Simon stood up and stared hard at Judas. His arms shot up into the air as he replied, “You know why. Jesus said that if we were to take provisions with us, the lost of Israel wouldn’t see that we needed a place to stay. We are to stir compassion in them, to the point of their repentance! That is our mission! Why is that so hard for you to accept? Anyway, we’ll be back before it gets cold so we won’t use the extra cloak and shoes. They would just slow us down. We have work to do for the Lord! Let’s go!”

Judas took note of the zeal within Simon. He sure is excited about this work,’ he thought. ‘I wonder how useful…?’

“Alright, Simon. I’m glad that He sent you with me. Tell me…do you understand why the Pharisees are so hot about Jesus. They wander after us and ask the most confusing questions. Don’t they realize that He’s our Deliverer? We will be free of Roman oppression and He will be exalted as our King!”

Simon cast a sidelong glance at his companion. “The religious community is upset because Jesus is performing miracles…and He’s given us that great gift, too! The Pharisees know their jobs are in jeopardy. They would lose their status with the people and of course, favor and gifts, too. Just wait until our people see the sick healed, demons cast out and hear the message of salvation! They will truly want Jesus as their King!”

The disciples continued on their way, each consumed with their own thoughts. Excitement about the coming Kingdom of God and the miracles they will perform quickened their hearts and minds.

“Hey, stop that!” cried Simon.

“Oh, you’re no fun,” moaned Judas as he brought his staff back to the ground after a tickling attempt. “I hope we’ll be there soon, I’m getting hungry!”

“Shouldn’t be long, now. I can see some smoke up ahead. Besides, we have the Word of the Lord to feed us. Let’s pray for strength.”

The two entered the town and the people questioned the strangers. Soon, a man of modest means offered his home for their use. After resting, Simon and Judas preached repentance of sins. All who came were healed and delivered.

In the quiet of night, Judas Iscariot pondered his situation. 'Many gifts were given besides food and shelter. This may be profitable for me as well as for Jesus. After all, I’m working, too. Maybe I should go talk to the Pharisees…'


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Karen Schravemade08/23/05
I liked the way you began this story. I very clever play on words, considering your subject!
Phyllis Inniss 08/24/05
I too like the play on words at the beginning of your article foretelling of things to come. Very interesting.
Tammy Johnson08/25/05
Fun creativity in the interactions between disciples. Fun hint at the luggage part, too (the cloak and shoes), although it may not be enough "luggage" to carry the theme. Thanks!
Jan Ackerson 08/25/05
I really appreciate that you captured just the seeds of Judas going bad. It's not a side of him that we usually see.
Marie Gabbard08/25/05
Very well done. Ease dropping on the disciple's conversation was a great way to make them very real and human. I sometimes forget they were.

Really neat possibiility of how the bad seeds could have started in Judas.
Crista Darr08/25/05
Good humored, yet serious. You've shown us how subtle sin can be, starting with just a thought or a murmur.
Lynda Lee Schab 08/25/05
Loved the opening - very clever! Creative take on topic. Well done.
Blessings, Lynda
Beth Muehlhausen08/27/05
Both clever and meaningful. Good job!
Maxx .08/27/05
Nice storyline. I think Judas came off just a little bit like a spoiled kid ... as opposed to an adult going bad. BUT, it just flavored him a little different than I'm used to. An enjoyable read!
Suzanne R08/28/05
I often wonder too why Jesus told them not to take anything. Love the title - very witty. Well done!
darlene hight08/28/05
Nice job and perspective!