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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Purple (11/05/09)

TITLE: In the Amethyst Mist
By Jim McWhinnie
11/09/09


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In the Amethyst Mist

somehow lost in yesterday’s mist,
draped in jewels of deep amethyst,
she strolls in the gloaming of days gone by,
and gowned in the silks of a pale violet sky,
she caresses the memories of her being kissed,
and her voice but a whisper of a soft-spoken sigh.

the time that once was is the time that must be,
as she waits for her guests for her afternoon tea,
she will wait and wait by her porcelain clock,
and listen and listen for someone to knock,
and the hours will pass and no one shall she see,
yet she will pour herself tea and to herself she will talk.

the light in her life has gained a patina of old,
the dust on her dreams has become powdery gold,
the lace on her charm has become wrinkled and worn,
as the diary pages have become tattered and torn,
and the stories therein are read and re-told,
of loves once conceived that never were born.

so she will tend to her violets and pour jasmine tea,
in the fragrance of lilacs, in the shade of her tree,
and pray to herself, “Lord, why must this be?”

and she will pray to herself, “Lord, why must this be?”


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Laury Hubrich 11/15/09
I love your title. This is so very sad, though.
Barbara Lynn Culler11/16/09
Oh the lonliness.... Very well painted.
Loren T. Lowery11/16/09
This poem has an ethereal quality about it that is simply beautiful.
Jan Ackerson 11/16/09
This is some kinda wonderful poetry! WOW, I wish I could write like this! Just--WOW! My favorite so far today.
cindy yarger11/16/09
Well written. I enjoyed your word usage.
Ruth Ann Moore11/17/09
This was truly beautiful. A second and third reading only enhance it more. Lovely.
Bryan Coomes11/18/09
Beautifully morose while strong on topic.
Bryan Ridenour11/18/09
Beautiful word usage. Fantastic poetry. Nicely done!
Henry Clemmons11/18/09
Some beautiful poetic things going here. I really enjoyed the technique, the feel, the voice, the texture of your words and sounds, but I never got a grip on who "she" is and how she and her are related to the voice of your piece. You used she and her nine times each, maybe, in the future you could consider a different word like the widow, or the spinster, or whatever. You deliver this beautiful backdrop to a poem with no vision of its subject. Just a thought. but, very lovely.
Betty Castleberry11/18/09
A lovely unsung song. The imagery was wonderful.
Carol Slider 11/18/09
This is SO lovely and wistful--absolutely beautiful poetry. Have you ever read T.S. Eliot's "Portrait of a Lady"? For some reason, this reminded me of that. Very well done!
Chely Roach11/18/09
This was gorgeous. Exquisite word choices. Loved it...
Chely Roach11/19/09
Oh, and congratulations on your EC! Well done:)
Margaret Kearley 11/19/09
O wow! This is amazing. What a beautiful and heart-rending poem. Congratulations.
Verna Cole Mitchell 11/20/09
Beautiful--meanings and words--a great poem!