The Official Writing Challenge
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Oh my goodness. WOW! If this is the affect you wanted hon, you got it. Very riveting and suspenseful and so much of a need to hear story, especially these days of militant vigilante attacks. I was on the edge of my seat the entire time I was reading this. Great voice! I wanted more.:0)
11/07/09
Powerful, powerful, suspenseful, moving, gut-wrenching, tear-jerking...what more do you want?
11/09/09
great writing! INTENSE right up until the very...
11/09/09
Excellent job with the suspense, and with the bold plotting that forces the reader to think about shades of good and evil.

Tweak: Be careful of using "your" when you mean "you're".

This is outstanding, thought-provoking writing.
I want to hear what happens next!
This is white-out good writing. Way to go.
11/09/09
Oh wow! What an ending! This story is filled with tension and heart-pounding suspense. The count-down was an excellent addition to the stress you put me under. :) Great job!
I couldn't stop reading. I like that you left an open ending for the reader to fill in. Very well done.
11/11/09
That was really good...suspenseful. It seemed kind of strange to me that Esme would go there, but other than that the writing and the story was great!!!
11/11/09
Gripping and emotion-filled. Your ending was very effective!