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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: White (10/29/09)

TITLE: The Birth of a Lamb
By Bryan Ridenour
11/04/09


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Docile sheep dotted Bethlehemís hillside,
Shepherds abiding, watching with care.
These creatures preserved for Passoverís Temple,
Unknowing, they frolic, no need to beware.

At nightfall the twinkling stars in the heavens,
Joined ranks with the moon, in lighting the earth.
When lo! in the heavens, an angelic chorus,
Proclaimed to the shepherds, a new Saviorís birth.

The herders, excited, they hastened to see Him,
A bleating of lambs, joined the angels in song.
The slumbering night, awakíning with glory.
A heralded praise to whom praises belong.

One little lamb caught up in the melee,
Chased after the shepherds, to Davidís small town.
With eyes on his master, sojourned to a stable,
Cattle and donkeys and other lambs Ďround.

Burly and brawny, the Shepherds pushed forward,
Longing to see whom the angels foretold,
Bowing before, this Promise of ancients,
Fulfillment of prophícy, told, long, long ago

The lamb nudged to see who caused the commotion,
An infant asleep; not yet Herodís scorn.
The stable alive with Godís radiant glory.
Maryís sweet Lamb, our substitute born.


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Laury Hubrich 11/06/09
I love this poem. I really like the idea of the lamb nudging up to baby Jesus. Sweet.
Linda Wright11/07/09
This is a lovely retelling of the birth of our Savior. I enjoyed it very much. Linda
Dolores Stohler11/08/09
Loved your beautiful poem. A creative retelling of the Christmas story. Well done.
Joy Faire Stewart11/09/09
You've painted a beautiful picture of our Savior's birth. Loved it!
Shellie Goff11/09/09
I loved this poem. I enjoyed seeing it from the lamb's perspective. Very nice.
Jan Ackerson 11/09/09
Excellent! Find someone to set this to music--it's very melody-like.
Patricia Turner11/09/09
Terrific. I sense some sacrificial symbolism in the first stanza. I agree; very melodic writing.
Margaret Kearley 11/10/09
A great poem about the miracle of Christmas. Love the last two lines - 'The stable alive with Godís radiant glory.
Maryís sweet Lamb, our substitute born.'
Janice Fitzpatrick11/11/09
Just beautiful and this flowed so wonderfully and easily. I could hear a tune with it as I reread it. Then again the Lord often gives me lyrics with tunes so alot of poetry that I read I end up hearing music or a tempo and beat. This is gorgeous! Loved it. Thank you for writing it.Praise God for the substitute Lamb.
Beth LaBuff 11/11/09
I'm so glad I read this. What a thought this is, "These creatures preserved for Passoverís Temple." I really like your message and story here!
Ruth Brown 11/11/09
A wonderful poem with an awesome message!