The Official Writing Challenge
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11/06/09
The Lord meets us in our need, no matter where that might be, or needs to be. Good story and right on topic - well done.
11/07/09
Well done indeed! The Lord always knows how to bring something good out of something bad. Always!
11/08/09
I enjoyed the way this unfolded and agree its right on topic.
11/09/09
Good writing. I'll bet your MC makes the most of "another chance". God is good.
11/11/09
I love the way you handled the dialogue in this story.

Critique: The scenario (near death experience; reconciliation with family) is somewhat familiar and predictable; I'd hoped for a twist of some sort.

I really liked your last sentence; what a wonderful final image to leave with your readers!
11/11/09
You took me to another world with your beginning. (and I loved seeing that glimpse of "the other side"). I like your use of "veil" in this and what it signifies.
11/11/09
A lovely story and a very good read. I like your use of a gentle voice, yet powerful and alluring. You have captured the sense of awe, yet at peace in the presence of the Lord. Sometimes, we certainly need to take a closer glimpse of what is to come in order to appreciate the present. We certainly need God as the Head of the family while we are here on earth!
11/12/09
Good descriptions, good progression and tone.Awesome message. Well done!