The Official Writing Challenge
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I like some of your metaphors and your ending is good too. Nice story.
I was touched by your story, written with much feeling and compassion and I liked the idea of the chocolate snowflake--the title drew me in. Excellent writing!
11/06/09
I love your story and how you told it with beautiful descriptions and well-written dialogue. Nice job.
11/06/09
Beautifully written! Drew me in!
11/07/09
I really like how you set up this story and your title is perfect.
11/09/09
I liked how you drew me in emotionally, it was easy to root for this child. Momma's words became an integral part of this story, it set the tone for what happened. Well done.