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Very interesting story.

Bittersweet....but with a most satisfying ending for the soul. This line struck me:

She had asked Jesus to forgive her so many times for the same things she did wrong that she wondered if she had fooled herself into believing she was a Christian.

So tragic (but true) that we sometimes feel that way. Great job!
A good allegory. It reminded me a little of the David and Goliath story. You had one or two small spelling errors but nothing to take away from this powerful story.
Exciting well thought out story. I saw an error or two, but most likely you caught them by now.I liked the story keep that imagination going. Bleesings to you.
Very intense!
Awesome story, kept me on the edge of my seat.
This is a scary story and I believe could really happen!
Good stuff. I always enjoy your writing, even though this one is the stuff of nightmares.
Pretty awesome, good job.
Congratulations on your third place win... I sat on the edge of my seat reading this... well done.
Wow, so skillfully written, Mick! What a story! Congrats on your 3rd place ribbon!
Thankyou to everyone for your support and comments and to the judges for the third place award.

Mick Dawson
Thank you for this glimpse into 1 Corinthians 13:12, about one day knowing as we are now known. Very powerful.