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10/29/09
A whole lot of green and a whole lot of serious story here. As a big supporter of our men and women in the military, I am very biased...so of course, I loved it all.


May God bless!

Sincerely,
Dan Blankenship
10/29/09
I too love our servicemen and women and never realized how much green was in their lives. The first line is missing the word the before backpack. Other than the missing article, nothing else caught my eye as being off. It was a well written look into a day in a wounded soldiers' life. Excuse me while I wipe away red, white and blue tears.
10/30/09
You presented a very realistic slice of life from your MC's perspective. Good job.