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10/22/09
Dark-- black-- indeed. This creeped me out and I mean that in the most complimentary way. Very unique.
10/26/09
Very Poe-like!

I felt a little bit squeamish about the subject matter, though. The narrator's consequences for his evil and occultish deeds are only implied (great ending), and that's problematic on a Christian site.

From a writerly point of view--wonderful entry, strong in all of the most important short story elements and exceptionally well-written.
10/27/09
This would have benefitted from a longer word limit, I think. I loved it, and it reminded me of my dear old literature books I never touch any more (sigh, life outside of college). I agree that some consequences might have been more appropriate, but I also like that, true to real life, the most immediate and horrifying consequence is the terror of guilt. A guilty conscience can be worse than any other punishment..