The Official Writing Challenge
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Oh, what has the "Doll" done? ...missing because of leftovers? He'd be long gone from my house, too. Very enjoyable, love the ambience of the story.
10/22/09
Loved this-- so authentic and tongue in cheek... I was chuckling right along. fun read!
10/24/09
Made me want to read more!
10/26/09
I chuckled at your references to black hidden throughout, and also at your nod to "film noir." Well done.
10/27/09
my mind went to humphrey bogart. great narrative. leftovers? what a reason to leave home. lol
10/27/09
I could almost smell the cigar smoke coming from his office.. I enjoyed all the descriptive and character words here and had to smile at the "left-overs."
10/28/09
Great narration! I felt and heard the character throughout the piece. It was alsmost like listerning to the old series when Sargent Friday used to narrate the action.