The Official Writing Challenge
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10/22/09
These words capture how something beautiful can become something ugly instantly: The woods turn sinister and dark. You cross a bridge and the river below becomes a fathomless pit emptying into hell itself.
You captured the parents' layered emotions with your scripted words and phrases. A riveting account of a parent's worst nightmare--I was stunned by the last line.
You had my heart racing with this entry.
10/22/09
Your descriptions are phenomenal, as is the tragedy revealed in your story. This is as "black" as it gets, as heart-gripping. Wonderful writing.
10/22/09
I really liked your words of description and the way the story built. I was confused by the last sentence though. Did the boy kill the person who died? Or did the person who died do something to the boy?
10/27/09
You have such an incredible way with words! :) Your finely-crafted descriptions create such vivid scenes and moods--very rich! The ending was such a shock, too!
10/27/09
Wonderful poetic images...yes, dark and deep,...mesmerizing. Such effective use of contrast in this piece. You've led your reader into one of the darkest areas of human experience. For a writer, that is a tricky, difficult task. You've pulled it off skillfully and left your reader with a shudder that lingers. Way to write!
10/28/09
Oh my, the minute details, phenomenal atmosphere, plus suspense,it's all there. Excellent writing!
10/28/09
Oh wow--the voice of this piece is pitch perfect. Masterful craftsmanship.
10/28/09
You drew me in gently with beautiful prose, then gradually sifted in tension, then fear, then despair, and before I realized it my heart was racing. Then the ending line punched me. Wow, this is good writing.
10/28/09
Amazingly crafted. You built up the tension so well to chilling conclusion. Wonderful layers of meaning here, too. Exceptional!