The Official Writing Challenge
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I was riveted to scene as it unfolded. Very intense. Great writing.
10/26/09
Very exciting--I could see it all unfolding.

I'd have liked some context...where is this? When? And perhaps hess description of the building and the operation, and more of your MCs feelings during the assault.

This reads like a scene from an excellent action movie.