The Official Writing Challenge
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10/22/09
The world needs more Laurels to help out the Stella Bellas. Nice story.
Interesting. If memory serves, Stella means starlight. Possibly her light is temporarily hidden behind the black, temporary clouds of life and Laurel (crowned with glory) is there to help brush them away. I really liked the last line as it gives hope to the outcome of Stella's life.
10/25/09
The Gothic look really gets me. Especially young kids. But, I know they're seeking something even if they are coming up void.
Some punctuation slips, commas and colon use. The first two sentences use double negatives and kind of threw me a bit.
I like the take on the topic your entry offers.

Mona
10/28/09
I love your MC's attitude; she came across as real, not at all holier-than-thou.