The Official Writing Challenge
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10/26/09
Oooh, I hate possums! They're like giant rats, only without the charm.

Fun story--maybe a bit of a fizzle toward the end. I'd have liked a hint that maybe Mandi and the young officer might spend more time together, rather than the "wrapped up" final paragraph.

I'd have been terrified, too--and you portrayed that very well.
10/26/09
Very simplistic story, but I felt the darkness the entire way through.