The Official Writing Challenge
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10/26/09
Good job with this resurrection story.

Since you had words left over, I would have liked to know more about your narrator. Who is he? What is is relationship to Jesus? What happened next?

Really good application of the topic word.
10/26/09
More, more, more! You ended too abruptly. I felt the narrator was a she, not a he, because of the woolen shawl. I kind of feel as though I was left in the dark.
10/27/09
I love the concept, but I agree with the previous posts that extra information would have helped.

This is a personal preference, but I also felt this might have benefitted from a present-tense telling. It had an in-the-moment feel, which I found very appealing.