The Official Writing Challenge
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10/26/09
Wonderful! So many poetic elements here--the repetition, the onomatopoeia, the every effective quatrains with their (aaaa) rhyme scheme--this was great!
10/26/09
Yes, nice poetic form. I for one can relate, having attended several military funerals.
10/26/09
Wow! This is great! I could see it... your poetry is outstanding. This is very creative!
10/26/09
What a unique composition. This is a dramatic presentation, with much meaning. Goo writing.
10/26/09
Oooh, fantastic imagery, nice pacing, just terrific all the way through. And bless you for honoring your uncle in this way!
10/27/09
Poem paints vivid, heartfelt picture. well done.
Oh, Wow. This is excellent! The blend of sounds and images is great...
10/27/09
Muffled drums draped in black really set the mourning tone for this excellent piece. I could feel the empty, dark place of sadness.

Mona
10/27/09
Wonderful! Paints a beautiful, sad picture (in black).
10/28/09
Loved the "sound word" - rrrum. Just set the mood perfectly and made the piece almost musical. Could feel the author's emotion. Nice, nice job.