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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Luggage (08/15/05)

TITLE: Not Worth the Salt
By J. C. Lamont
08/16/05


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The sun dipped below the horizon and dark shadows filled the streets of the city as Johanna strained to catch a glimpse of her husband. The raw lamb, which she had preserved with salt, was now roasting over the fire. But her husband was late for dinner and she grew anxious. This city was not a safe place at night.

She caught a glimpse of a figure skulk around the corner and could hear the angry shouts of a brawl in a nearby alleyway. Pulling her shawl tightly around her body, she opened the front door, but all she could see was a group of scantily dressed women dancing around a small fire. With a shiver, she noticed most of the men lingering on the street were more interested in one another than with the girls.

She sighed with relief when she heard her husband, Lot, arrive a few moments later, but he wasn’t alone. Two handsome strangers accompanied him.

“Joanna, these men are my guests for the night,” he said. “I couldn’t let them stay out in the street,” he added with a whisper.

Johanna noticed her two teenage daughters appraising the men’s chiseled physiques with their eyes. “You are engaged, young ladies,” she reminded them, handing them extra plates to set out.

After the meal, Johanna and her family prepared to retire for the night, when a large throng gathered around their house.

“Lot! Where are the men who came to spend the night with you?” Voices shouted. “Send them out. We wish to rape them!”

Raucous cheers and obscenities followed this demand.

Johanna watched in horror as her husband rushed outside to appease the crowd. After a moment, one of the guests pulled him back into the house. The mob appeared discombobulated and groped around in the street.

“If you have any relatives living here in the city, tell them to flee at once,” one of men said. “The darkness that reigns in this city has reached the Most High and He has sent us here to destroy it!”

Johanna gasped in shock.

“My…my daughters have fiancés,” Lot muttered softly, pulling on his cloak.

As Lot rushed out to find them, the man turned on Johanna. “Pack whatever you need to take with you. You will not be returning.”

Johanna raced through the house, her mind reeling. There was so much to pack. She had barely begun when she heard Lot return.

“They didn’t believe me,” he said.

The stars grew increasingly dim as Johanna continued to pack everything they would need. Clothes for her family, food, money, the pretty trinkets her husband had bought her. She was deathly afraid of leaving something behind.

“It’s time,” one of the men said. “Leave or you will be caught in the city’s destruction.”

“A few more things,” Johanna cried, desperately trying to cram more items into her bag.

“Now!” the man ordered, seizing her hand.

The men led them through the streets of the city as streaks of pink and gold streamed across the sky.

“Run for your lives!” they said. “Do not stop. Do not look behind you! Escape to the mountains or you will be killed.”

Johanna barely paid attention as she rummaged through her bag. She had a horrible feeling that she had forgotten something.

“Woman!” the man shouted. “Go! And do not look back! Do you understand?”

Johanna nodded and hastily caught up to her family who had already started to trek up the hill.

Only a few moments later the ground began to shake violently. She could hear screams of terror as trees and houses were smashed to the ground. Tears welled up in her eyes as she thought of her friends, her house, her life.

Forcing her thoughts off the destruction behind her, she concentrated on what she had; her family and the few possessions she had managed to salvage. Suddenly she realized what she had left behind. The salt. Not just a seasoning, salt was a valuable commodity; a handful was worth a day’s wages.

She glanced behind her.

For a split second, she saw a large crater burned into the ground where the city once stood and thick, black columns of smoke rising from the ashen rubble of what once was her home.

As the sun rose over the distant mountains, a large pillar of crystallized salt jutted up from the hill overlooking the ashen remains of the city – a vivid reminder of a human’s instinct to value luggage over life.


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Lynda Lee Schab 08/22/05
Powerful entry and message. I always wondered why the pillar of salt (maybe that really is what Lot's wife turned back for. LOL)
Realistic action. Immersed me from the beginning. Well done!
Blessings, Lynda
Debra Brand08/22/05
Great take on a Scriptural event. I often wondered what she might have left behind. Very poignant.
Tesiri Moweta08/22/05
Now I see why she turned to a pillar of salt! Great Work! Thanks for sharing.
Tammy Johnson08/22/05
Wonderful take on luggage. A very creative and insightful possibility on why Lot's wife looked back. I really liked this one!
Shirley Thomas08/22/05
This is a very creative and entertaining article. Thanks for sharing your wonderful talent. (I know that feeling of thinking you've forgotten something of value. Too bad, Lot's wife lost the most valuable thing of all....her life.
Crista Darr08/23/05
Remember Lot's wife. What is it that tempts us to turn back? Great message. Awesome writing!
janet rubin08/24/05
Terrific! Great job capturing the atmosphere of sin, tension and urgency. I could feel it!
Venice Kichura08/24/05
I believe this one is a winner!
Jan Ackerson 08/26/05
Masterfully written, well-realized characters. You could have ended it without your last phrase; let the reader reach that conclusion on his own. Bravo!!!
Debbie OConnor08/26/05
WOW! This is great. A likely contender if I'm not much mistaken. You nailed the topic with great writing and an excellent message. I really enjoyed reading this story from Lot's wife's perspective.
Beth Muehlhausen08/26/05
A great re-write of this Biblical story! Enjoyed it very much. :-)
Suzanne R08/26/05
Great title. Impressive use of the big word 'discombobulated' too! Well done!
Maxx .08/27/05
well written.. I agree that it is a contender! Very good!
Kyle Chezum09/14/05
A very realistic portrayal of this awesome story! Good job.