The Official Writing Challenge
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10/17/09
I loved the descriptions of the scene, very evocative. The story felt rather heavily weighted toward telling rather than showing, and would have benefited from a more balanced approach, but an excellent use of the prompt!
10/20/09
I can picture the beach scene. Enjoyed the last paragraph especially.
10/22/09
Beautiful! You captured both the calm of the seashore and the turmoil of emotions and brought them together at the end.