The Official Writing Challenge
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10/15/09
Incredibly moving, gripping, and heart-wrenching! What else can I say? Thank you.
Well, you got me! I had to go back and read it all again to make sure that I had it right. I am glad that the last line helps to negate her sureness that there will never be another. Thanks.
10/17/09
Excellent story. The story was intriguing, the dialogue flowed smoothly and the ending a surprise.
10/20/09
Certainly could feel her pain. The suspense was strong and the ending nicely done.

Mona
10/20/09
This was interesting story. I liked it, but I was definately surprised by the ending. I guess that's what you were hoping to do, though.
10/20/09
Very well done.
10/21/09
Awesome twist, Pamela! You really "got" me. Really, really good story.
10/21/09
Very well-written. The twist did come as a surprise; I had to go back and read it again as well, to be sure I "got it." I'm glad that the last thought of brighter days ahead was handled with only one line, rather than the reader being hammered with it. Well done.