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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Luggage (08/15/05)

TITLE: LUGGAGE .. I WAS NEVER SO ANGERED
By Bonnie Johnson
08/15/05


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LUGGAGE...I HAVE NEVER BEEN SO ANGERED


PEOPLE, STORE IT... PACK IT... RUN IT TO THE AIRPORT.....BRING IT HOME FROM HE AIRPORT......LOVE IT... UNPACK IT...... THEY FIND IT........THEY USE IT... AND THEY LOOSE IT......IT IS GENERA LY A PAIN IN THE NECK......WHILE LITTLE ONES DIE... PEOPLE USE IT TO ESCAPE.....SO I DECIDED WHEN I LEFT ON THE TRIP OF MONSTROUS PROPORTIONS I WAS NOT TAKING VERY MUCH.... I WAS GOING TO MAKE IT ON VERY LITTLE .... AFTER ALL I WAS GOING FOR JESUS CHRIST..AND THE VACATION I WAS TAKING WAS FOR SOULS......ALSO TO HELP THE BABIES UNDER 20 WEEKS.... WHEN WE WENT THREW THE CHECK STATION AT THE AIRPORT... WE PASSED THREW THERE IN RECORD TIME.... NO CLIPPERS... NO SCISSORS, NO POCKET KNIVES.... JUST TWO BAGS.. ONE FOR MY SON AND ONE FOR ME....A FEW PERSONAL ITEMS AND TWO FLASHLIGHTS... JUST IN CASE THAT PLAIN WENT DOWN......LITTLE CHEEP ONES IN CASE THEY TOOK THEM AWAY FROM US....AFTER ALL MY DAUGHTER AND HER FRIENDS HAD OODLES OF CLOTHES THAT WE COULD USE FOR JUST PACKING A TRUCK AND DRIVING IT 4,5OO MILES.... SO WE WERE FINE......THOSE CLOTHES WERE LIKE A ROLLING STONE... THEY WERE ALL PACKED CAREFULLY IN THE LUGGAGE.... THE MORE THEY PACKED .... THE MORE THE LUGGAGE GREW....EVERY TIME THE DOORS TO THE CARS OPENED ... OUT CAME THE LUGGAGE.....IT GREW BY THE DAY..... THEY BOUGHT NEW LUGGAGE AND STORED MORE LUGGAGE IN THE TRUCK.....IT WAS POSITIVELY AGGRAVATING....I JUST BOUGHT THE KIDS ROCKS AND COW BEANS....IN LITTLE BAGS AT SPECIALTY STORES ALONG THE WAY.....WE DID STOP AND BUY SOME CAMPING GEAR... SO I HAD THAT TO STORE IN A 29 FOOT TRUCK..... IN THE FRONT OF COURSE...I WAS STICKING NOTHING OF MINE IN THE BACK OF THAT TRUCK.... THE ONE WE WERE MOVING HAD ROACHES IN HER HOUSE.... AND MY LUGGAGE WAS NOT TOUCHING THE BACK OF THAT TRUCK.... WE THREW IN TONS OF BUG POISONING... AND EACH TIME WE OPENED THE TRUCK TO PUT IN MORE DISCARDED LUGGAGE... ONE OF THOSE LITTLE CRITTERS WOULD WAVE HIS ANTENNAS AT ME AND DOWN THE DOOR WOULD GO AND SO MY LUGGAGE STAYED IN THE FRONT OF THE TRUCK....FAR FROM THE LOCKED BACK END OF THE TRUCK.....THEY HAD AN EMERGENCY ONE TIME, SO WE HAD TO BACK TRACK WITH THE TRIP 300 MILES TO PICK THE WOUNDED ONE UP AND THE REST OF THE CARS.......WHEN WE GOT THERE THEY HAD MOVED OUT OF THE MOTEL... AND THERE WAS LUGGAGE ONCE AGAIN ALL OVER THE PARKING LOT OF A SHOPPING CENTER.....IT LOOKED LIKE THE HAT FIELDS AND THE MCCOYS...THE ONE CAR... ALWAYS THE SAME...IT LOOKED LIKE IT HAS EXPLODED..... GET THAT BACK IN THE CAR... WE ARE LEAVING IN TEN MINUIT'S... YOU WILL STAY HERE IF YOU DO NOT GET THAT LUGGAGE LOADED......I WAS FURIOUS.... THAT WAS JUST ONE REST AREA.... THERE WERE MANY MORE... EACH TIME SHE UNLOADED THE LUGGAGE....I WAS STARTING TO LOOSE IT.....I COULD NOT STAND IT.....EACH TIME SHE COMPLAINED ABOUT HER LUGGAGE AND HOW SHE WAS LOOSING IT...ONE PIECE AT A TIME I REMEMBERED THE TWO LITTLE BAGS...WE WOULD WEAR WHAT WE NEEDED AND WASH IT RIGHT AWAY....SO WE HAD EVERYTHING WE NEEDED...IT WAS A JUST A DRIVING TRIP ANYWAY......NOTING SPECIAL...I SPOKE TO A LOT OF PEOPLE ABOUT ABORTION, FETAL RESEARCH AND HARVESTING FOR JESUS CHRIST..... TRYING FRANTIC LY TO GET THE WORD OUT..... WAKE UP CHURCH.. STOP THE KILLING OF THE UNBORN AND BABIES UNDER 20 WEEKS.. THEY ARE DIEING ONE RIGHT AFTER ANOTHER.....MY ONLY AGGRAVATION WAS THAT LUGGAGE... I FINLAY TOLD THEM IF YOU UNLOAD THAT MESS ONE MORE TIME I AM LEAVING...WE PUT THE DOGS IN ONE CAR AT LAST... SO SHE WOULD NOT HAVE ACCESS TO THE BACK OF THE CAR..... AND SHE STILL UNLOADED THE LUGGAGE....I WOKE UP ONE MORNING ABOUT 19 DAYS INTO OUR TRIP AND SAID ... I AM LEAVING...MY FAMILY IS GOING WITH ME... AND YOU CAN UNPACK YOUR OWN TRUCK...BETTER HIRE SOMEONE....SHE THOUGHT WE WERE KIDDING...IT WAS THE END OF THE TRIP.. SHE WAS SAFELY TO VIRGINIA... AND I WAS HEADED HOME...SHE SAID YOU CANT DO THIS TO ME.... I SAID YES I CAN...ITS YOUR LUGGAGE NOW....SHE FOOLED AROUND THE WHOLE TRIP... WHY.. SO MY FAMILY A LOVING FAMILY COULD UNPACK HER LUGGAGE AT HER LEASURE.. SHE WAS USING US..GOD PUT A CRIMP IN HER LUGGAGE... WE WENT HOME AND LEFT HER TO HER LUGGAGE....


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Jan Ackerson 08/22/05
I think you had a great story to tell here, but it was difficult to read. If you'd used more conventional storytelling, I think your point would have come across more readily. The caps and ellipses are distracting. I think you had something important to say, though.
Nina Phillips08/25/05
I thought your story was interesting, and I understand the frustration and charactorization, but hard to get through because of the capital lettering. I noticed a few spelling errors also. I think the anger showed through with using all caps. Keep writing. God bless ya, littlelight