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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Blue (10/08/09)

TITLE: All That Sparkles, Isn't Gold
By CJ Raney


The sun was just peeking through to the coral reef below the ocean. All the sea creatures were waking up. The corals were stretching their tentacles towards the sunlight. The starfish were shifting to the top of the sand. The fish were all starting their daily routines to find food.

Mr. Curious was a Blue-fin Tuna. Every morning he went for his morning swim around the reef. He knew that the deep blue bottom was where he belonged, but couldn’t help coming to the reef. Mr. Curious liked checking all the crevices to see if there were any new neighbors. The reef fascinated him. Everything was so colorful and active. It was boring at the bottom of the ocean.

As he glided along saying good morning to everyone, a small sparkle caught his attention. Mr. Curious looked around to see if anyone else noticed it. “Maybe it will be breakfast.” He thought to himself as he swam cautiously towards the shiny item floating near the edge of the reef.

He became more intrigued the closer he got. “Wow, it is so pretty.” It glistened in the sunlight. “What could it be?” Mr. Curious slowly circled it trying to make up his mind if he wanted to taste it. The glistening object had him mesmerized as it grew closer. Before he knew it, he was right on top of it. All he had to do was reach out and grab it. “Maybe I shouldn’t. I really don’t know what it is. But if I don’t someone else might come along and get it. Then I will miss out. Maybe just one small taste.”

“Ouch! That hurt! What’s happening? I don’t want to go up there.” Mr. Curious said as he was being pulled to the top of the blue water.

We are all the same way as Mr. Curious. We see all the beautiful things that look so good to our eyes. The closer we get to them the more likely we will fall into the trap. Sin will always take us farther than we want to go and cost us more than we want to pay. So, remember Mr. Curious, the next time you think something looks too good to pass up.

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Joy Faire Stewart10/15/09
Through the descriptions, I could see Mr. Curious swimming in the ocean around the coral. Excellent job weaving the lesson into the story.
Lollie Hofer 10/16/09
Excellent description of the reef, I could see it clearly while reading. Good point to the story as well. Great lesson for Sunday School or Children's Church.
Brenda Shipman 10/16/09
I enjoyed this because it reminded me of an Aaesop's Fable, and I LOVED those as a kid ... and when I read them to my own kids. Great lesson about sin's "disguises."
Shilo Goodson10/20/09
This had a great moral. I could see it coming, and I wanted to warn him, but he had to make the choice on his own. I think there's a lesson in that too. God sees us headed towards a bad decision, and he wants to warn us, but we have to make the decision on our own.
Mary Knoll Santos10/21/09
An excellent read-aloud to children. Engaging, intriguing, and made me curious too!

Thanks for writing this.