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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Blue (10/08/09)

TITLE: Indigo Nights
By Debra Martinez
10/11/09


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Indigo Nights

Breathe in; breathe out
Shallow necessity.

Thoughtlets gather; time moves slowly.
Mind numbs, accepting weighty memory.

Receptors register stillness;
Emptiness; fatigue.
Time moves so slowly.
Mind struggles; erase. Delete.

Breathing deepens; droplets form,
Silently, they descend on
Well-marked pathways.

Ripples of air touch
Exposed limbs. The only
Motion in empty space.
Time. Moves. Slowly .
As it heals. If it heals.
Please let it heal.

Inertia is hard to overcome,
Especially in darkness.
Lilting blues fight with static, probe the heart, birthing wails.
Weeping heightens, arches, lingers.
Ride the wave; feel the ebb.

Time moves, slowly.
Breathe in; breathe out.
Velvet darkness mimics sleep,
Lids open to the blackness.

The sun rises, revealing
A sky of beneficent blue.
Something stirs within
That the darkness could not waken.

Time regains momentum;
A ripplet of hope unfolds its wings.
Daylight bleaches indigo waves
Lifting suffocating heaviness.

Night briefly banished;
I rise to embrace the day.


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Jennifer Galey10/16/09
I love poetry and relished the imagery in this beautiful piece!
Danielle King 10/16/09
Excellent! I think you are describing a clinical depression. I liked your use of, 'Time. Moves. Slowly;' and the way the perception of time began to change. Very well crafted!
Brenda Shipman10/16/09
Your careful choice of words and pacing were excellent here. I appreciated it so much more the second time I read it through. Then I truly felt like I had crawled inside the skin of this person and felt the weight of the world on his shoulders - the weariness of life, when even breathing in and out took effort. Great job with this!