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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: First (as in original) (01/10/05)

TITLE: Leah, Won't You Listen?
By Melanie Kerr
01/12/05


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She is his first love
She is his only love
Do not become party to this scheme
Do not stand in her place

Your eyes have witnessed
Your heart weighs the truth
His happiness lies with her
Never with you

Long has he laboured
His spirited love
Fashioning years
Into fleeting days

Deeper than beauty
Beyond what the eyes see
Love ties their hearts
And binds their spirits

He has tasted honey
And touched silk
You have nothing to offer
That he wants or needs

He will rise in the morning
Limbs lingering with passion
He will look for her
And find you

And love
Like a flame extinguished
Will leave, cold and empty
His heart is your hand

This is not
Your flower-strewn bower
With joyous laughter like vines
Weaving love around your bed

But only your prison
Loneliness and loss
Like severe guards
And tears like stern sentinels

Snatch at happiness
And it will vanish
Like an early morning mist
In the heat of the sun

You will never be first
Not his first waking thought
Or the first lips his mouth seeks
Because she will always be there


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darlene hight01/17/05
Very moving! It must have been heartbreaking to be Leah.
Sally Hanan01/17/05
Excellent. You definitely feel with her , not just for her.
Wayne Thomson01/17/05
That is an awesome, your a talented poet.
Kathy Cartee01/17/05
Very good. you captured the truth of love eyes for only one.
Tesiri Moweta01/18/05
You are a great poet! It's as though you were right there with Leah.
Thanks for writing.
Keep winning and shining for Jesus.
Suzanne R01/18/05
Beautiful. And isn't it interesting that while Leah obviously always wanted her husband's love and never got it, nevertheless she became an ancestor of God's own son - her son, Judah (named by her, name meaning 'to praise God') was father of the tribe into which our Lord was born. Your writing is beautiful ... and it is also comforting to know that God had a very special place for her even though her husband didn't.
Debbie OConnor01/18/05
Wow. I love this. Beautifully written and so truthful.
Deborah Anderson01/22/05
Very well done. God bless you.
L.M. Lee01/23/05
I think Leah would be pleased with these words
Anne Linington03/08/09
I thought I would read some of your older material too, trying one from each year. You have a great gift for connecting with the story emotionally and then conveying that in beautiful verse. I do hope you will publish a selection one day if you haven't already done so. Many would be blessed by these gems.
Anne.