The Official Writing Challenge
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I love this story! I hope is non-fiction! Either way, it is precious.
10/09/09
A great start--very interesting--but you had so many more words, and I wish you had used them. Burned at the stake? When you mention something as shocking as that, it'd be great to tell us more. Why? By whom? And you could strengthen the topic tie-in by mentioning the jacket earlier, maybe by finding it in the back of a closet and reminiscing...I loved this, and I wanted, more, more!
I enjoyed reading this story.

There were some things that I felt needed more explaining. The "burning at the stake" part really threw me for a loop, because I didn't know if he had literally been burned or if this was a figure of speech. Using your full word count would help flesh these things out in more detail.

I appreciate you sharing this story with us, and I look forward to reading more of your stuff in the future.
10/13/09
Like the others, I wanted more, but this is well written.