The Official Writing Challenge
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09/17/09
I believe you've captured beautifully in poetry what Francis Frangipane has said. "Why waste energy criticizing what's wrong when our prayers can change it!" As usual, nice job.
09/17/09
Your writing here is very moving and so excellently told. Wonderful work!
09/18/09
Ah yes--things aren't always what they seem. Enjoyed the comparisons between the two women and your MC's enlightenment at the end. Lots of poetry this week, and yours is worthy of a second read. Great job.
09/22/09
I enjoyed your poetry and your lesson.
Very nice! A good reminder to Praise the Lord in ALL things. We never know what's really going on with others and comparing is a big waste of time.
09/23/09
It's so true that often we think that those who don't have real responsibilies are just enjoying life when in reality those responsibilities give us a real purpose in life. You have a great representation of this idea in your poem.
Excellent poetry. Your last two lines sum up the message well.
Wonderful poem with a great message. Excellent!
09/23/09
The last line so perfectly ends this poem. And I want to tack these lines on my wall as a reminder:

"He gave me all these things to do,
These jobs to keep my hands,
Busy working dawn 'til dusk,
So I could fill His plans."

Your message is relevant to all ages. I lost the rhythm a few times, but enjoyed your poem very much. Nice job.
09/24/09
Congratulations on placing with this story/poem. It told an important story, and was fun to read.
09/24/09
So much truth here... how many times do the people we envy also envy US? Well done--congratulations!
I thoroughly enjoyed this! Beautiful :)
09/24/09
I'm thinking the pity-fest is now over. :) Congrats on your EC!