The Official Writing Challenge
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09/17/09
Great article. Having worked as a reporter, I was able to identify with the co-workers being left with copy they had not been used to handeling. I also liked the direction the conversation took, telling us about God's retirement plan.
09/17/09
Very nice...and it is always tough to see good workers leave the workplace.


Keep writing!!!

May God bless.

Sincerely,
Dan Blankenship

09/19/09
Not sure how the title connects with the story. I can think several ways it could be woven into the story but I would like you to have done it.
09/21/09
I kept waiting for Nan to open one of the airplanes and find a special message just for her...
09/22/09
The baton is passed. With your MC's retirement, in the post-Katrina New Orleans, his real ministry could begin, starting with rounding up the lost sheep of the congregation. Great story!
09/23/09
I liked this story a lot. Some of the dialogue toward the end felt a little stiff and lost some of the rhythm of the rest of the story, but overall, excellent!
09/23/09
The retiree volunteers keep our church going - great story. I'm not sure I've figured out the significance of the paper airplane but I like how it kept "sailing" into the story. ;)