The Official Writing Challenge
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Good story. Good descriptons. I could feel the shock and fear when the can lit up. I liked the comparison of the goodness of God's rules to the parent's rules, both meant to protect and help, not wreck our fun. A good reminder that tryng to get as close to the flame as we can without getting burned, usually ends up with us getting burned. Lots of good things to think about. Good job.
Loved this story.Good lesson to be learnt. Kept me captivated.
09/14/09
Very good way of presenting a life lesson.
Wow! What a hard way to learn a lesson. Vivid descriptions and I especially enjoyed the next to last paragraph.
09/14/09
Those innocent, mischieveous minds never realize the danger at the edge of their fun. This held my interest from start to finish--also liked the lesson tucked within.
09/15/09
This had a wonderful truth, and I liked that the devotional aspect didn't feel forced. I loved the line, "The can sat on its own, holding the charred remains of my very limited perspective." Great story!