The Official Writing Challenge
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09/11/09
What an entertaining story. I loved that Emily was up to no good with the boys, and that they left her hanging. Absolutely perfect last line, too. I am still grinning:)
09/14/09
This is certainly a change of pace for you! I loved the dreary descriptions in the first third, because I just knew you were setting me up for some mischief. Fun use of simile there, too.
09/14/09
Any child that had to sit through long, drawn out sermons can relate to this one. It surely put a smile on my face. This moved along at a good pace and was easily entertaining.
Quite entertaining. Reminded me of mischief I participated in as a PK. Well done.
I thought this was adorable. Loved the mischievous MC, and loved the vivid descriptions. Two thumbs up.
Omigoodness, when I read this line: "Mrs. Wenford swelled like a steamed pudding tied with string" my coffee came spurting right out of my nose onto the computer screen! How funny is that! I can just picture Mrs. Wenford because every church has a few, dressed in the material appropriate for that age: voile. hehehehehe
What a great story. I hope you place at the very tip top with this one! Kudos!

A delightful fun story of mischief.Love the way the scene was set.
Oh, I like this. I loved your descriptions and the ending was perfect. You havea way with words.:0) Well done.:0)