The Official Writing Challenge
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09/11/09
"...precocious to the point of exhaustion." What a priceless description. I absolutely loved Alice and her Dad. Perfect combination of wit and wisdom, and the last line was the crowning glory. Tee hee. LOVED this.
09/14/09
A delightful tale. Curiously enough this is something we have never had to tackle with any of our children - possibly because none of the houses out here have chimneys!
I was a little put off my some of the Americanisms. I had to look up Mary Janes to see what they were. And I don't understand the reference to the judge. But that's just an outsider's perspective. I'm sure your story works very well for a US audience. And she really is precocious. I particularly liked the body language and secret signals.
09/14/09
Very enjoyable writing. Loved the interaction between father and daughter. And, though she wasn't in the "scene," the mother's presents is very evident. Excellent!
09/14/09
Absolutely precious. I love tender interaction between fathers and daughters.

Teeny red ink: It's Claus, not Clause.

I loved the same line that Lisa mentioned in her comment...just wonderful!
09/14/09
Cute, sweet, tender, sensitive,and so much more. Loved the ending too.
09/14/09
The dad in this seems very sensitive. I like that.

Your little girl is charming. I had a clear picture of what she looks like.

Kudos for this sweet story.
09/15/09
Wonderful story and a precursor to what I will be facing in my household soon. I could see this play out in my mind and I loved the ending. Well done!
09/17/09
This is just beautiful and tender and real. I love it.