The Official Writing Challenge
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09/03/09
I like the story you told through this poem.
09/03/09
Your free verse is written beautifully with the promise of harvest finally made clear at the end. The first stanza was my favorite, poetically.
09/03/09
Beautiful! I love the story and the style.
09/04/09
I felt sad for Ava as she waited for the return of a lost love that never came--but when I got to the end I felt I may have misinterpreted this lovely poem. The ending clearly speaks of going to her eternal home.
09/09/09
What a beautiful picture you have painted. I can see her waiting to be reunited.
09/09/09
Cat--this is AWESOME! So poignant and bittersweet, kind of heartbreaking, actually, and using so many poetic tricks!

One of my fave poems here, ever. Whoop!
09/09/09
I find it amazing how a complete story can be told in so few words by those having the gift of poetry.
09/09/09
Beautifully written, with a wonderful story told. Well done.
09/09/09
Beautiful! I would say you are a "real" poet.

The theme reminds me a little of the Tanya Tucker song, "Delta Dawn." I'm not making a comparison, though. This is much more sophisticated. Two thumbs up for this well done poem.
09/09/09
Wistful words painting a poignant picture...and it left me wondering "Why" he never came back...
Excellent poetry!
~Cathy~
09/09/09
I am definitely NO poet, but this is lovely. I especially like the end.
09/09/09
Oooh! Wow... great poem!
09/09/09
Such longing and yearning. This is very deep and takes some pondering to appreciate fully.

Mona
09/09/09
I'm not a poet, but I think this bittersweet story with its vivid imagery is absolutely lovely! I love your use of repetition (come harvest time, it's harvest time, etc.).
09/10/09
If you don't win EC with this one, I'll eat my proverbial hat! Big time kudos, my friend! **grin**