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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Autumn/Fall (08/27/09)

TITLE: God's-eye View
By Rachel Burkum
09/02/09


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Weeee! The thrill! The excitement! Oh my, the drop! The wind rushing by my face, the cool, scented air tickling my nose... Thereís nothing like it in the world!


Crawling out to that thin ledge, I looked down, down, down. It seemed to go on for miles. I almost didnít have the guts to go through with it. Oh, but the thought of soaring high on the breeze was enough to make my antennas twitch.

I latched onto that dry leaf as if a hurricane was coming. I thought weíd never take off. But one good gust of wind, and whoosh! Away we went, I and that ruby red maple leaf.

I know, leaves arenít something to toy with. They can pile up and bury an ant like me if heís not careful. But riding one like this? Iíve never felt so alive.

Up, up, up, higher and higher towards the sky we went. I gazed down on rolling fields, rich and golden, bare of harvested crops. There were orchards filled with rows upon rows of luscious green apples. The fragrances were like no other. It was as if the season was suddenly condensed and wrapped up in a tiny package just for me. My mouth watered at the thought of spicy cider.

I flew over a pumpkin patch and dreamt of sliding down those prickly vines. Indian corn hung from someoneís porch - a perfect place for hide and seek. Mmm, I think I smelled a pumpkin pie.

My eyes became slits as the leaf picked up speed, rushing over a crystal brook. I gazed down upon trees of gold, bronze and orange. Some looked as though they had been set ablaze as their red leaves boldly proclaimed their beauty against the sun.

The magic carpet, I clung to so tightly, took me above the forests, over meadows and through streets that rang of childrenís laughter as they ran through piles of their own leaves. I ducked, barely missing the branch of an old oak.

Spinning around and around, the world became a kaleidoscope of browns, yellows and tufts of stubborn greens. And finally...finally, the ride began to slow. My nerves were racing. I could hardly catch my breath. Grasping the edge of my leaf, I guided the aircraft to the edge of a wide open meadow where locusts and crickets sang their final songs.

The world seemed so still as I finally stopped. Looking over my shoulder, my eyes could see only the tall grass towering in front of me. But spying a tree just a few hundred yards away, I could swear I saw another leaf just starting to fall. Maybe I could make it in time. Godís view of autumn was worth a second go.


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Allen Stark09/03/09
Isn't it great how we can see God's wonderful creation through the eyes of something as insignificant as an ant. But then ants have always intrigued me with their ingenuity. Loved it!
Catrina Bradley 09/04/09
This may be the most creative POV I've ever seen! Everything is described so well - I enjoyed flying and floating with this ant. And the ending is just what I'd want to do if I were him. I LOVE IT!!
Charla Diehl 09/04/09
Thanks for the wonderfully enjoyable ride through the creative POV of an ant. Nice take on the topic.
Verna Cole Mitchell 09/04/09
Your pov made this story fun. I'll be watching to see who's catching a ride on the falling leaves in my yard.
Marijo Phelps09/09/09
Creative, innovative and I enjoyed the read! Marijo
Ada Nett09/09/09
How clever! A bird's eye view from an ant! Nice vivid descriptions!
~Cathy~
Sarah Elisabeth 09/09/09
Very creative and well written! Enjoyed reading about my favorite season from an ant's POV :-)
Scarlett Farr 09/09/09
How clever. Never would have thought to look at autumn from a bug's perspective! Nicely done
Mariane Holbrook09/10/09
What a great piece of writing. You'll place high with this one! Kudos!