The Official Writing Challenge
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09/03/09
Very sweet.
09/04/09
Well written and interesting story. I'm not sure about your title, but I am notoriously awful with titles, so not a good judge. I enjoyed this. Good job!
The title was a definite challenge on this one. I got the same response from a "pre-reader" friend so it was not you at all. Sometimes they title themselves and other times...???
09/06/09
The title drew me in but suggested a very different genre than the one I found. Nevertheless a gently crafted tale that flowed smoothly. I think it would have benefitted from a bit more tension - worries about the future, more uncertainty about the soldier's fate, etc. But it's good that you've got someone to pre-read for you. A great way to catch the little errors.
09/07/09
Tender, touching story.