The Official Writing Challenge
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08/31/09
I love it. The boy's chatter to his little brother sounded just right, and I like the change of POV to the grandparent to finish telling the tale. I have no critiques, only a "Good Job".
It took me a few minutes to realize who the Michael was that Jason was talking to, but once I did, I absolutely loved your story.
09/02/09
The end of your story ties itself back to the beginning and creates a tender circle of love...good job and very creative!
~Cathy~
Great job with this story. I really enjoyed it from start to end.
09/03/09

A wonderful, tender story! An excellent illustration for family togetherness.

Loved it muchly!