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Transitions is just the right title for this beautiful poem, connecting the birth on earth all the way to the heavenly birth.One of my favorite things about the poem was the sense of family and of being loved--even before the actual birth, along with the hope of family all together again with Jesus. You've included wonderful thoughts to treasure here in verse.
08/29/09
You've captured so much in a short piece. Excellent job!
08/29/09
Your title is perfect. You have taken the reader (me)from your mother's womb to your mother's arms, into a loving family. Then you have taken me beyond that, seeing the world as it is during your lifetime (the vivid description of the world around you) to beyond that, looking forward to the NEXT life...I could recognize your style of poetry. It is always superb. What can I say. As I have said before, you are my favourite poet...God bless you. Have a great visit with your sister...Helen
08/31/09
I loved this! Especially the 'baby in the womb' verses. You obviously have a gift.
I was going to start listing some of lines I especially liked, but there are way too many of them!

A wonderful poem.
09/02/09
Very good job switching from the earthly birth to the heavenly one! A seamless transition on the poet's part!
Beautiful entry. A wonderful look at the transitions of life. Nicely done.
Gorgeous! Perfect title.
09/02/09
I really like it - I don't know WHAT you're talking about. I lived every stage of this poem as I read - beautifully and expertly expressed.