The Official Writing Challenge
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I liked this! A fun and sort of whimsical way to "lead" the reader on a tour! And the last stop was the wedding feast...wow. :-) Good creative writing, here.
08/19/05
An interesting take on it.
08/19/05
Maybe you have to knock me over the head, but I'm not sure I got your point about the first two stops. But I LOVED the punning name of your tour guide.
08/20/05
Not sure it all flows together, but I liked the image of the church and stadium and how we can start out great, but lose sight of Jesus and his heart to our own destruction.
08/20/05
Well-written, free-flowing dialogue. The message I get from this piece is that the true heart of Christ is not behind the white-walled churches with manicured lawns, but only after the cross.
08/20/05
loved the character. He was great! good job!