The Official Writing Challenge
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Your article caught my attention because of the German title. It is a good article but I did want to tell you that your use of "Sie liegen" is not correct. "Liegen" means to "lie - as in lie down" You need to use "Luegen" instead, which means to "tell a lie".
It's an easy mistake to make! But thank you for the story. I hope you continue writing it.
Your story was a visible reminder of how a spark of humanity can light the darkness. I liked especially your characterization of the old man.
I liked the fact than an unlikely alliance formed between two enemies--with survival in common. Very well done.
08/20/09
Thanks for augmenting a barely-imaginable scenario (for us) with a tangible sense of acceptance and forgiveness.
Well done.
08/21/09
Stories about war always sadden me, but I liked the message within that spoke of faith. God can use any circumstance to test us and grow us. Good job.
08/23/09
War-story horrors. Yours is well written and pulls at the heart. Enjoyed this entry.
Mona
08/23/09
Compelling story with strong sense of place and believable characters. I would have liked you to flesh out the converation that was developing between the two characters, rather than a paragraph of facts, though. :-) yeggy
What a masterful telling of a story of unlikely friendship and salvation wrapped in an environment of bitter war. Outstanding.
08/25/09
Sehr Gut! Ochen Hahrasho! (My best high school German and pigeon Russian for Very Good!)
Wonderful story and congrats on your EC!