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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Winter (the season) (08/13/09)

TITLE: A Moment of Temptation: Memoirs of a Third-grader
By Linda Payne
08/16/09


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The day held so much promise
when we got out of bed,
a thousand feet of snow had fallen!
“No school,” the weather man said.

We hurried through our breakfast,
made plans to fill our day,
a winter wonderland was waiting
for sledding, skating, and play.

But first the law of mother
so we wouldn’t catch our death,
she swaddled us like mummies
‘til we couldn’t catch a breath:

Long johns, sweaters, pants, and hats,
two pairs of gloves and socks,
a snowsuit sealed it all in place,
a scarf wound tight and locked.

Plastic bags inside our boots
for added dryness and warmth,
like brightly colored beach balls,
we bobbed and bounded forth.

I don’t know what possessed me
as I gazed out at that day,
like the apple in the garden
I was tempted from my play.

The flagpole stood majestic
all slick and covered with ice
a silvery sweet popsicle
my tongue it did entice.

Oh, the pain, humiliation,
now what was I to do?
My tongue was held a captive
by an evil, unseen glue.

I heard the squeals and shouting
of the kids upon their sleds,
and felt their fear and excitement
as down the hill they sped.

All around me friends were playing,
with their snowball fights and forts,
building snowmen and snow angels
and other winter sports.

Even worse my pain and suffering
if they should find me here
stuck to this stupid flagpole
I could hear their laughter and jeers.

And what about my family
would they miss me, would they care,
drinking cocoa by the fire
while I’m eaten by a bear?!

Oh, they’ll be sorry, that’s for sure
when they awake next morn
staring out the ice-glazed window
at my stiff and frozen form.

And what a funeral they’ll give
with weeping and with cries,
there’ll be a touching eulogy
as in my box I lie.

But then an amazing thing happened,
it was a miracle, I was free!
So I waddled off to join my friends,
“Hey you guys, wait for me!”


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Loren T. Lowery08/20/09
Loved this and it brought back so many memories and I have to admit, some of the exact same thoughts of being forever caught on that flagpole. I think you captured the voice of the 3rd grader perfectly.
Charla Diehl 08/20/09
Cute and entertaining poem that certainly brings back memories from long ago days.
Beth LaBuff 08/20/09
Love your title! I've heard stories of this happening.. you've made it so much fun. This was my favorite stanza, "Oh, the pain, -- humiliation, -- now what was I to do? -- My tongue was held a captive -- by an evil, unseen glue." Wonderful creativity in this poem!!!
Mariane Holbrook08/20/09
Can you believe my little brother actually did this, too? What a darling poem and you managed to include every piece of winter wear in it. I used to think it took more time getting ready to play in the snow than to actually play in it! What wonderful memories and you've done a great job in pulling them all together in a colorful, adorable piece. Kudos!
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/20/09
What a charming poem! It brought forth such childhood winter memories. I had my own funeral planned, too! They'd all be sorry.
Kimberly Russell08/20/09
I really enjoyed this poem and yes, it brought back many memories for me as well. It actually sounded like a little kid would talk- nice job.
Deborah Ann Belka08/21/09
Too cute! Made me laugh and I needed that tonight. Thank you for this wonderful poem full of whimsy and delight.
Eileen Knowles08/22/09
Very entertaining piece! Enjoyed it!
Mona Purvis08/23/09
What messes we can get ourselves into. Very fun poem with great winter images.
mona
Lynda Schultz 08/23/09
hehehehehe, what fun. Pity the poor kid!