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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Adulthood (07/30/09)

TITLE: When I Grow Up I Want To Be An Adult
By Connie Dixon
08/06/09


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Adulthood isnít solely measured by a personís age.
In fact itís really more about a certain mental stage.
When I was a kid I couldnít wait to grow into
A person more mature than all the other kids I knew.

I wanted all the good things and the fun that adults had
I hoped to get some benefits, same as my mom and dad
But then I started pondering and agonized my fate,
I figured out that adulthood really isnít all that great.

You can stay up late and watch T.V. or on the town you lurk,
No matter when you go to bed you still must go to work.
You might receive the nicest gift at Christmas time this year,
But Christmas shopping cost you lots and winterís almost here.

You buy your shoes on sale or not, it really doesnít matter
But when the Visa bill comes in thereís always lots of chatter.
Cooking is your specialty but kids must do the dishes,
You have to feed your family plus dogs and cat and fishes.

When we all go on a trip, adults get the front seat.
But navigating highways is really quite a feat.
You dial the tuner in and then you listen to your station,
I hope my friends donít hear it that would cause humiliation.

Dad says when Momís cranky that sheís going through the change,
Iím not quite sure just what that means, sheís acting really strange.
So you see that being an adult is not that great,
I guess Iíll just be patient and enjoy life while I wait.


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Margaret Gass08/06/09
That going to work even when we play and being responsible every day is the fine print that gets ignored when we are kids and feeling bored...so know that you have spoken truth, though I'd rather be an adult than once more a youth!

Good job!
Seema Bagai 08/11/09
I liked the contrasts in the lines in this poem. As a child, adulthood seemed so wonderful. I'm not a poet, but I found a few lines hard to read. Maybe some commas are needed. Not sure. Good work.
Ada Nett08/11/09
I like the way you contrasted the "freedom" of being an adult with the "responsibility" of being an adult.
Mona Purvis08/11/09
Hits the nail on the head. Good take on the subject.
mona
Kaylee Blake 08/11/09
I'm not normally persuaded to read poetry entries, but this was so light and cute, and oh-so true! Good job. And an excellent conclusion, indeed :)
Mariane Holbrook08/11/09
You've given new depth and definition to the term "adulthood." You spent some time on this entry and it shows! Kudos!
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/11/09
When I grow up, I want to be an adult, too. ;-) You covered the topic well with my favorite definition being "a certail mental stage."
Catrina Bradley 08/11/09
I don't want to grow up, and you've given many reasons why in this poem. Not sure I understand the radio station causing humiliation, tho. Probably just me. :) Nice job!
Sara Harricharan 08/12/09
That last line on your first verse is so VERY true. I can relate to it in more ways than one and it fits what I think we all feel at one time or another. Good job!
Joy Bach 08/14/09
Reading this was a stretch for me. I usually skip poems. But you did a great job of being on topic. It seems you can write in many ways.
Philip Barrington12/02/09
Brought tears to my eyes.