The Official Writing Challenge
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08/06/09
Well-written. I could feel the tension and struggle. This piece kept me interested throughout.
08/11/09
Wow...a touching struggle. I ached with and for the MC. Great piece!
08/11/09
I forgot everything else while I was reading this one! It's very well done and I hope it places high. Kudos!
08/11/09
You took us inside a sad world with this one, excellently presented emotions.
08/11/09
Lots of angst, tension, anger, worry, hopelessness in this one. I'm pulling for her.

mona
08/11/09
Such raw emotion! Good descriptions("showing") although you might have overused the word "shuffle" ;) Very nice!
08/11/09
Tense and heartbreaking, I totally felt for the MC. Very well written...
08/12/09
It's so tough to grow up and be on your own. Very good piece of writing. I could feel her pain and now I'm sad:(
08/12/09
Lots of painful reality in this piece. It really brought out a lot of emotion in me. Good job!
08/12/09
The scene of the mother in the house was tangible and the feelings of the daughter all too real with an exposed resentment yet a hidden tenderness as well. One couldn't help but imagine there was/is more to the story as this young woman continues on her journey into adulthood, necessarily leaving some of her dreams behind - but maybe only temporarily.
08/14/09
Very good description of "growing into adulthood". So many issues out there on the fringes. More please.